Writing Lyrics.

[Joebuddha]

Superman by Joe Todaro


Sometimes I wish that I were Superman

And I could do everything that he can

I'd bend steel bars to impress my friends

Fly to work and then back home again

Chorus

But I know it ain't true

Cause I can't see through you

and you'd be my Lois Lane too

and I would be your Superman


I wish I had a Fortress of Solitude

Cause all my friends would think the coolest dude

But I don't think that I would wear those tights

But I know the cape it would fit just right



But I know it ain't true

Cause I can't see through you

and you'd be my Lois Lane too

and I would be your Superman


I would be hanging out with the Justice League

Wonder Woman seems like such a tease

and me and Green Lantern you know we'd fly through space

and the Flash and I yeah we'd have a race


But I know it ain't true

Cause I can't see through you

and you'd be my Lois Lane too

and I would be your Superman



This is an old song of mine ( like 10 years) that I've started performing again recently and it's going over way better than it did 10 years ago.

[Agrippa]

COOL !


I like it !




reminds me of course of the Kinks.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Ypts1vot ... re=related


"I looked in the Mirror at my pidgin chest,

I had to put on my clothes because it made me depressed"


"I´m So Scared, I´m So Thin.

I wish I could fly but I can´t even swim."


You can now consider your lyrics compared to Ray Davis.

That´s a compliment in my book !


:clap1:

[Joebuddha]

Thanks Dude!!

I had forgotten all about that Kinks tune.

[German Shepherd]

I love the idea of Fantasy based lyricism i.e. Maiden, but I find my self getting sucked into narrating too much and wondered if any of you had any advice to avoid that pitfall.

[Tatosh Guitar]

German Shepherd said:


I love the idea of Fantasy based lyricism i.e. Maiden, but I find my self getting sucked into narrating too much and wondered if any of you had any advice to avoid that pitfall.


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Wow, talk about necro-thread!!


i am not sure how qualified I am to answer this, since I can’t write a lyric to save my life (I can sing, I can write articles and essays, and I am quite good guitar solo composer, I will give myself that) but I totally suck at song lyrics. Anyway, Are you singing this or writing for somebody else to sing the words? I ask because not even Maiden avoided this you describe. Dickinson would complain that Harris would write words that “don’t fit on a human mouth”, meaning as a bass olayer he didn’t really get that somebody was supposed to sing that stuff. My advice is don’t fall in love with your words too much, if you feel it’s too much, it totally is, and if you can sing or imagine the lyrics being sung and it fits then it’s probably ok. If it doesn’t, scrap it.

[German Shepherd]

That’s good advice-it’s one thing to recite a line in a monologue, but a different thing altogether to sing it.


I suppose I should study more lyrics along that vein and find out for myself what goes down smoothly and whst gets me marble-mouthed.


Again, good advice TG-thanks!